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Clouds arrive at the pace
of oxen, stopping to drink
at the misshapen TV dish

picking up NASA signals.
The petrified cactus
near a humming Wurlitzer

says nothing. Lost travellers
stare at it by the bar,
hoping it might show them

the way, the bubbles in their
beer muttering

I want to go home
I want to go home
I want to go home


not noticing the clouds glowing
like lightbulbs with their electricity
and the entire desert moving
closer, ready to circle like moths.
Enjoy
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Daily Deviation

Given 2011-06-04
The last bar in the Mojave by *Tigermoth99 takes reality and paints it with words into an elegant world that is both our own, and so fantastically not. "It uses just a few words to paint a haunting moment of loneliness." ( Suggested by zebrazebrazebra and Featured by nycterent )
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gummyrabbit Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011  Student Writer
The atmosphere in this piece is fantastic; I felt like I was there
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MirellaBailey Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this piece - it's a great concept, perfectly realized. Congrats on the very well deserved DD :)
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IntraCoastAngel Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What wonderful poetry! To read it is pure joy!
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kecharagrl Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
IU enjoted this very much. ;)
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Birdkiller Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Professional Writer
Embrace the suck.
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MrsUnderground Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Lol... I live smack dab in the middle of the Mojave and was born and raised here.... I have to say... It does suck here but you bring a whole new life to what that means...
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FastPuck Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011   General Artist
May I ask where in the Mojave? I was born and raised here too! xD
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MrsUnderground Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Grew up in North Edwards next to Edwards Air Force base, went to school in Boron. Married a Marine stationed at Edwards AFB and now I live in the Lancaster Palmdale area.
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FastPuck Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011   General Artist
Aww, awesome! I'm in Twentynine Palms. So, we're almost close by! But not really, lol.
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MrsUnderground Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Oh! My brother is a Marine stationed at the base there lol.
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FastPuck Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011   General Artist
Haha, I'm not surprised. xD
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numbskulled00 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very cool-great visuals
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Vigilo Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Student Writer
Congratulations! Excellent work. Simply wonderful. :heart:
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Calin-4 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wonderful job! The words flow so beautifully.
Lovely...simply lovely
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ndifference Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Professional Writer
At last, someone who knows what an enjambed stanza break is. And used to nice effect. Well done.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hey..!! a DD :party:
Congratulations mate. :):)
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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chadwood Featured By Owner May 30, 2011   Writer
It draws you in and beats your brain with genius. Way to use every single word to its utmost powerful effect.
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norui Featured By Owner May 22, 2011   Writer
This is gorgeous. The repetition in the second to last stanza is perfect. A really wonderful read. :D
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intellawolf Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Student Writer
I still cannot comprehend why your words infatuate me so.
This truly is wonderful. The imagery is powerful and as always leaves a strong and lasting aftertaste in the brain to ponder.
Thank you for this.
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Tigermoth99 Featured By Owner May 21, 2011
Thanks :)

That's very kind of you to say. I'm pleased you enjoyed reading my piece.
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intellawolf Featured By Owner May 25, 2011  Student Writer
You're very welcome.

I'm sure that more people than just myself have enjoyed this wonderful work.
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